Comments On My First Draft Of The Trailer

I asked some people what they thought of my trailer (first draft) this is what they had to say,

Here are some positives

·         One person said they thought the costumes were effective and could tell the protagonist was supposed to be a detective.

·         4 people said the song Run Rabbit Run was really effective because it was catchy and “stuck in their heads” which made them remember the trailer

·         One older man realised the connection between the song Run Rabbit Run and the photo that David finds in the trailer and worked out that the plot bringing everything together is that its related to ww2 – which he said would make him more interested in seeing the film.

·         A woman said they thought the music in the middle (the heartbeat music) was good at raising the “tension and ramping up” the trailer

·         Someone said that the different camera shots/ angles made it more compelling to watch

·         Most people liked the font type I used and said “that it fits with the thriller genre”

 

·         The car screen is really good and "creepy" with the ghost

 

 

Some things that I could improve/ change

·         Make the shot with all the headlines on it longer as it was “too quick” to read

·         The shot at the end of the trailer with the car screen was too quick and “couldn’t see what was in it”

·         One person said there were too many bits of music in the trailer

·         The beginning with the bath/blood was confusing – they didn’t know how it relates

·         The loud sound effect used when David opens his eyes, one person thought this was a gun shot and that he was dead and that the rest of the trailer was a flashback

·         A couple of people were confused as to the speech at the beginning of the trailer, “there’s another one round that corner.” They didn’t know what was around the corner.

·         Someone pointed out that there wasn’t an age rating and classification anywhere in the trailer – so I will put this in in the second draft


·         The beginning was too slow and felt like a film opening

·         Could speed up the editing in the beginning

·         The intertitles went to quickly
  

Most people understood the plot and how it all linked together but were confused about the supernatural elements

Older people I asked understood the plot better and thought that the context was more important.